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Research shows that increasing number of people are now living in mega-cities of more than 20 million inhabitants. Is it this a positive or negative development ?

Living in major cities has become a popular choice for many people in modern society. Much has been discussed about the impacts of
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 phenomenon. In my opinion,
this
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 trend could have both positive and negative consequences in equal measure. On the one hand, I acknowledge that the development comes with certain drawbacks. First of all, there is a constant occurrence of traffic jams during peak hours or in crowded
neighborhoods
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.
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, high population density puts significant pressure on urban infrastructure. Many schools cannot accommodate
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 a lack of available beds for patients. They
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 lead to an imbalance in population dítribution between different regions.
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,
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, as far as I am concerned, the pros of
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 phenomenon could be surpassed by its cons.
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resident
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residents
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who live in
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 places are likely to have better employment prospects, as a diverse and dynamic
labor
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 market. On top of that, it is easier to reach medical services, educational institutions, and a wide range of recreational options. It is
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 that living in big cities allows people to experience and learn about diverse cultures, thanks to the presence of tourists from all over the world. In conclusion,
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 the increasing number of people living in megacities can negatively affect the environment and create uneven population distribution, it
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 offers benefits in terms of employment and access to modern facilities. Governments should promote equal regional development to limit the overcrowding in big cities.

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Introduce your main points clearly in the introduction.
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Make the connection between ideas clearer with linking words.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points.
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You provide a balanced view, mentioning both positive and negative aspects of living in mega-cities.
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Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main ideas.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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