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: Some people believe that in the future, environmental problems will mean that we are unable to live on this planet. In order to survive, the human species will need to find another planet that can support life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In today's rapidly evolving world, the long-term habitability of
Earth
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 escalating environmental problems has become a subject of considerable debate. Some argue that these challenges will eventually necessitate humanity's migration to another
planet
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 capable of supporting life. I strongly disagree with
this
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 perspective because
Earth
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 is the most well-established
planet
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 among all planets and, currently, individuals and corporations are implementing several measures to tackle environmental problems. One primary reason why I hold
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 view is that
Earth
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 is the
most
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ideal
planet
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 to live on in the solar system.
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 is primarily
due to
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 the fact that our
planet
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 is comprised
of not only
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 a sufficient amount of nature, water, air, and other natural resources, but
also
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 the extensive
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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 needed to live an ideal life. It is more likely not possible to migrate
into
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 a new
planet
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 and build all natural and man-made resources from scratch within a feasible timeframe. To illustrate, building developed countries,
such
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 as Japan or South Korea, took approximately six decades (1940-2000), which clearly shows that the transformation of life and establishment of complex societies is an incredibly challenging and time-consuming
endeavor
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.
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, another significant point to consider is that nowadays, humans are becoming more aware of protecting the environment and actively working towards solutions.
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 is because governments from all around the world, supported by Global Environment Non-governmental Organisations, have initiated massive campaigns and initiatives to save the
Earth
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 through simultaneous small movements. A case in point is the encouragement for individuals to shift from using private transportation to public transportation, resulting in
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declined
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carbon
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in carbon
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 emissions. Car manufacturing corporations
also
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 take part in
this
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 movement by investing heavily in research regarding product development and environmental impact, eventually producing electric vehicles that are environmentally friendly. These combined measures done by both individuals and companies are actively helping preserve
Earth
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 as the safest
planet
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 for human habitation. In conclusion, I firmly believe that the idea of humanity needing to abandon
Earth
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 environmental issues is not justifiable.
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 is
due to
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 the fact that
Earth
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 remains the most proper place to live on, and people are actively trying their best to help protect it.
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 highlights the ongoing commitment to environmental preservation and the inherent challenges of interstellar migration.

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task achievement
You provided a clear opinion and supported it well throughout the essay. Keep focusing on answering the question fully.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more linking words to enhance the flow between points. This will improve how your ideas connect.
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Make sure each point is explained deeply with examples. This helps in making your arguments stronger and clearer.
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Your introduction clearly outlines your position on the topic, which helps set the stage for your argument.
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You provided good examples that support your main points about Earth and environmental actions.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • sustainable development
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • biodiversity loss
  • climate change
  • greenhouse gases
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitable planets
  • space colonization
  • terraforming
  • ethical dilemmas
  • resource allocation
  • technological advancements
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