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The chart below shows the resuits of a survey about people's coffee and teabuying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.Summarise the information by seiecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the resuits of a survey about people's coffee and teabuying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.Summarise the information by seiecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The data displays the proportion of individuals residing in the
cities
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 of Australia and their habits of
coffee
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 and
tea
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 consumption over a month.
Moreover
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, Australians have shown a high percentage of caffeine consumers and cafe visitors, whether it is
coffee
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 or
tea
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, especially in the cafes of
Melibourne
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Melbourne
 and Hobart. It was illustrated that about 63% of
Melibourne's
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Melbourne's
 residents have visited a cafe for the purpose of drinking
tea
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 and
coffee
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.
However
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, individuals who reside in Adelaide and Brisbane were shown to have visited cafes the lowest across the other
australian
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Australian
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cities
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 in the latest 4 weeks, with a proportion of approximately 49%% and 55%.
Furthermore
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, fresh
coffee
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 buyers
were
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was
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overall
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 low compared to people who buy instant
coffee
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. In Sydney and
Melibourne
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Melbourne
, it was shown that about 44% and 43% of individuals tend to consume freshly made
coffee
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. In
contracst
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contrast
, a proportion of 33% prefer to drink a fresh cup of
coffee
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 in Brisbane and Adelaide nowadays.
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, the number of instant
coffee
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 buyers was close across Australian
cities
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, with Hobart being the highest.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 over the
last
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 4 weeks, the habit of
coffee
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 and
tea
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 consumption
at
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in
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 public areas is more common than buying instant
of
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or
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 fresh drinks of
coffee
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across
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drinks across
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 the
cities
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 of Australia.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, coffee, tea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • city
  • percentage
  • compare
  • trend
  • age group
  • prefer
  • daily
  • weekly
  • occasional
  • habit
  • popular
  • results
  • features
  • identify
  • analyze
  • note
  • distinguish
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