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Write a letter to your friend who is visiting a city that you know well. -Recommend places worth visiting. -Where to eat. -How to get around the city.

Dear Rick, Hope you are doing well, I’m very excited that you are visiting my
city
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Goraya
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, Goraya
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next
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, next
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 month on July 28th. I want to give you some insight
of must visiting
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 places as well
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as recommendation
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recommendation
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recommendations
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of
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for
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 delicious food. Even though
goraya
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Goraya
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city
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 is very small as compared to big cities still there are
number
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a number
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 of places to visit. Since you are coming in
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the summers
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summer
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summers
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summers,
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 the famous amusement park the
Wonderland
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Wonderland,
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 will be open. If you want to pay your obscene to any religious
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temple,
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then
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must
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you must
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 visit
eminent
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the eminent
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 ‘Rishi Temple’
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. along
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along
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Along
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 with
this
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, you will witness the premium architecture and
small
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a small
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 pond
which
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, which
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 is one of the scenic beauties of our
city
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.
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 in
goraya
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Goraya
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city
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 there
is
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are
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not
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no
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a
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apply
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big restaurants, the street food is outstanding
due to
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this
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apply
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people from
countryside
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the countryside
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areas
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apply
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always come to enjoy the exquisite taste of food.
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 is located in the
center
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centre
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 of the
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city
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city,
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that
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which
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 is called the ‘Street Bazar’. The
city
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 has beautiful views
despite
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 the fact
if
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 you commute by bus. I always recommend you travel by bus as the buses are more convenient and reliable as compared to rented cars and taxis. commuting in a
buses
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bus
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 is easy as the bus stands are available on every corner of the streets. The unique feature of these buses
the
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they
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 have maps installed
so
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, so
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 there will be
less
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fewer
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 chances of getting lost. Looking forward to hearing back from you soon. All the best, Shivani

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure all sentences in a paragraph relate to the same idea.
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Include more details about the attractions and food places to enrich your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use simpler sentences to ensure clarity.
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You have a friendly tone, which is great for this type of letter!
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You provided useful information about food and transport in the city.
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