Some say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no denying the fact that companies should think about how they can increase the number of their customers.
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held belief that advertising is
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successful way to raise sales, there is
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an argument that advertising is a very old method and it does not have significant effects. 
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this
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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, in our
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world, social media has a crucial impact on individuals' brains
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, using different platforms for marketing will assist in increasing the number of people who will know about the
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.
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, a lot of people now make their decisions to pay
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their
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influencer
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reviews about it.
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,
last
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week there was a significant rise in new perfume because of the advertising campaign
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by a perfume manufacturer
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included many influencers.
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, some people believe that there is a more creative way to attract customers' attention to the
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. It is
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possible to say that the quality of the
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commodity
or its package is more important than spending money on advertising.
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, the client will repay the
product
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depending on their experience with it. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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question, On balance,
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, I tend to believe that advertising has a vital role in marketing nowadays, even of there high cost, it will be not only the reason for the rise in
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sales in any company, but it will
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increase the financial returns.

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Try to make your introduction more engaging by clearly stating your opinion earlier.
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Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects to your main idea.
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Add more specific examples or details to support your points.
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Good use of examples from social media and influencers.
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The essay is well-organized with separate points of view.

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