In today’s world, some people think that museums and art galleries are unnecessary because everything is available online. Do you agree or disagree?

There are some countries in which most people prefer to have their own
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rather than
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one.
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is because having your own home provides you security from many threats
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such
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as money
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it should be seen as
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development because
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owners can decorate their
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according to
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their own style. Having your own
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gives you safety from money.
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makes you stress free from paying rents each month
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even if you have no money for eating something
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you have your own
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for living,
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gives you a sense of comfort.
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,
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is
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a basic need for everyone
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most give priority
of
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to
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living in their own
houses
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.
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, in Pakistan, more than 80% of
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the population
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living
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in their own
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.
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, they were poorer but they were happy than those who
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in a rented
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. It should be
as
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a positive development because people who are living in their own
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can design their
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according to
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their mood. Most parents and children wish to make
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their
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homes
as
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a comfortable place because it's human psychology
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that where
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he
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they
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lives
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lives,
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he
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want to design
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place in a beautiful way.
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, in developed nations, all of the
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owners designed their
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to feel
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place soothing and relaxed. In conclusion, most
of
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people want their own
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because it gives them safety from paying rents and they
also
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have
chance
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the chance
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to build and design their
houses
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as they like.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tangible experience
  • Cultural heritage
  • Curatorial expertise
  • Physical interaction
  • Cultural experience
  • Economic contribution
  • Preservation and conservation
  • Authoritative verification
  • Virtual platforms
  • Community engagement
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