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The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table gives information abouttable illustrates the number of
children
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 ever born to females aged between 40 and 44 years in Australia for per year the data was collected since 1981.
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, based on the data in the table, having two
children
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 was the most popular choice in 1981, 1986, 1996, and 2006. It can be seen from the table, having one child was the least popular choice in 1981, 1986, 1996, and 2006.
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 having one child over the year. In the first year, having two
children
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 exactly accounted for 29.0.
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 figure differs from other
years
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children
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 ever born to females at approximately 38.3 per cent in 2006, which was the highest figure throughout the years.
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,
on the other hand
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, having no
children
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 more less popular, about 8.5 per cent in 1981. In 2006, the percentage of people who had no
children
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 was higher than the percentage of those who had
children
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 in 1981. It was approximately 15.9 per cent.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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