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Self- practice :27/11 The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Self- practice :27/11 The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the number of foreign tourists
visited
Wrong verb form
visiting
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 three different regions of
European
Correct article usage
a European
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 country from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the coast and the mountains
had
Wrong verb form
have
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 increased the visitors. There
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 some fluctuations in the lakes from rise to fall.
At the end
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, every
locations
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location
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 in European
country
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
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 has
growth
Verb problem
seen growth
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 in their
tourists
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tourist
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.
Check wording
numbers.
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 In 1987, the coast
has
Wrong verb form
had
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 40
Use synonyms
thousands
Fix the agreement mistake
thousand
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 visitors visited and it went down in 1992 to nearly 35
Use synonyms
thousands
Fix the agreement mistake
thousand
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. After that, there was
significant
Correct article usage
a significant
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 rise till 2007
year
Check wording
apply
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. The mountains had
some
Correct determiner usage
a
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 constant rise in visitors
in
Change preposition
apply
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between 1997 to 2007. So, it was around 20
Use synonyms
thousands
Fix the agreement mistake
thousand
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 in 1987 and increased to around 35
Use synonyms
thousands
Fix the agreement mistake
thousand
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 tourists.
On the contrary
Linking Words
, there
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 a lot of fluctuations in the lakes from 1987 to 2007. In 1987, it was 10
Use synonyms
thousands
Fix the agreement mistake
thousand
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 and after that it went significantly up till
year
Correct article usage
the year
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 2002 and
sudden fall
Replace the word
suddenly fell
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till
Change preposition
to
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 2007 around 50
Use synonyms
thousands
Fix the agreement mistake
thousand
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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