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The following graphs give information about the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) and employment sectors of adeveloping country. Write a report for a university Lecturer describing the information shown below

The following graphs give information about the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) and employment sectors of adeveloping country. Write a report for a university Lecturer describing the information shown below
The bar chart illustrates the two sectors
contrubate
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contribute
 to the GDP of
United
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the United
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Kingdome
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Kingdom
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 in the period between 1992 to 2000. In general, the highest income during the total period between 1992 to 2000 is an information technology.
However
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, the lowest sector
contrubate
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contributes
 to the
econmy
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economy
 based on the bar chart is
services
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the services
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 industry. In the
beggaing
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beginning
, the information technology data
reveales
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reveals
rise
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a rise
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 up by 33 per cent from 1992 to 1994, which indicates the growth of
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the econmy
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econmy
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economy
, but the year 1996 was not the optimal year for the field with
decline
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a decline
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of
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in
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 the GDP number. The next four years
is
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are
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 showing a massive
grow
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growth
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 with
sharp
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a sharp
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 increase
with
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of
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 12
GDP
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in GDP
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 in 1996. In
addation
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addition
, the peak is
on
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in
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 2000 with 15. On the other side, the service
industral
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industrial
 field data presents
with
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apply
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slow growth to the
econmy
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economy
compare
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compared
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 to the IT, which
is
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has
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 massively
increase
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increased
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 over 6 years. The sharp jump is seen
in
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from
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 1992 to 1994 by 50%
while
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 the rest is showing
increase
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an increase
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 by 20 % to 60%
To sum up
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, the
enhencment
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enhancement
 in the field is reflecting on the data more than
service
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the service
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 industry.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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