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The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts the
number
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 of women's births in women aged 44 to 44. It is clear from the graph that in 1981, 1986, 1996, and 2006, the
number
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 of
children
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 born decreased and having no chiled get upwards.
According to
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 what is shown, having four
children
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 or above was in the first
year
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 27,7 per
cent
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. In the next
year
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 of the chart gets into 18.9 per
cent
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,
also
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 dropping rapidly to 13,1 per
cent
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 in just ten years.
Furthermore
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,
last
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year
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 had a gradual decrease of people having more than four kids, it was 11 per
cent
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. Meanwhile, fewer than that
number
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 of kids with one kid dropped just 0,4% in four years.
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, it went from 24,6% to 21,5% from 1996 to 2006.
While
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 one child or none had almost similar numbers with 7,6% and 8,5% in the first
year
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 and got an extra 1,1% and 1,2% during the next bar.
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, in 1996 and 2006 they got from 11,4% to 13,2 for one child and 12,8 to 15,9 for having no
children
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.
To sum up
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, we could say that the two
children
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 born line had the highest birth rate since 1981, with a pure rate of 29%.
Also
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, got a rapid growth to 35,6% and a minor rise to 38,2. In an unprecedented way, the
number
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 increased by just 0.1.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, children, year, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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