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Band 4.5

Houses are essential for people. Some argue that governments should offer free houses for people who can not afford to pay for it. Do you agree or disagree with the statement.

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contemporary
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the contemporary
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 world, some
people
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 believe that
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government
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the government
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 should provide free
houses
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 to
people
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 who are not able to buy. If
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government
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the government
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will offer
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offers
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 free
house
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housing
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 to homeless
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people
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people,
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 it will
fluctuate
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increase
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 economic growth
,
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.
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In addition
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, providing
low cost
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low-cost
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 shelter and jobs to poorer
people
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 will help them to
spend
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apply
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life
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live
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 independently. I disagree that
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government
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the government
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 should not offer free homes to
people
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. On the one hand,
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Although
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although
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houses
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 are
primary
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a primary
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 need for humans nowadays.
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instead
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 of investing in schools and hospitals
which
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, which
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plays
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play
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 an important role in countries growth, investing
to build
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in building
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 many free
houses
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 can cause economic growth
of
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in
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 a
country
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.
For example
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,
If
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if
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country
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a country
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have
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has
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 less
modernize
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modernised
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 schools for
young
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the young
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 generation and hospitals with no
upgrated
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upgraded
 machines which can save
peoples
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people's
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life
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lives
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.
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instead
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 of providing these facilities
if
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, if
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government
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the government
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will invest
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invests
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on
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in
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 building
houses
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 for homeless
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people
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people,
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 it will lead to
an
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apply
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arguments between
peoples
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people
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 who are against
of
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apply
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it and
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country's
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the country's
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 economy will fall dramatically.
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,
primary
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the primary
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 solution for that issue is to provide
low paid
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low-paid
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 jobs to homeless
people
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 and
also
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 give them cheap shelters.
Moreover
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, it will help them to spend
life
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their lives
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 independently without anyone's fear.
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, if
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government
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the government
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 will on odd jobs for homeless
peoples
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people
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as
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, as
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 a
result
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result,
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 they will be able to pay
tax
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taxes
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 and help
to
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apply
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boost
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country's
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the country's
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 economy In conclusion, I disagree because
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government
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the government
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 should focus on promoting job culture to homeless
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people
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people,
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it
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which
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 leads to an economic and
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government
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the government
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 should invest
on
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in
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 sectors which are very important
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such
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, such
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 as hospitals and schools,
instead
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,
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apply
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 of investing
on
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in
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houses
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 for homeless
people
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.

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