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Band 4.5

In recent years,” responsible tourists” have paid attention to preserving both culture and environmrnt of the places thay visit. However, some poelpe say that it is impossible to be a “responsible tourist”. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

All countries have the pride of preserving and enhancing their culture through different
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 and
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. It is to showcase the heritage of the ancestors and to provide knowledge to everyone who wants to learn about different
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 and their way of living.
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, I have been a tourist to most countries in Southeast Asia
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 I would agree that
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 are great when following instructions in a foreign country. Tourist attractions can be well preserved if people can obey and follow the rules respectfully. Given that you might face consequences when you don'
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 abide
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 the law.
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, people are very mindful when they are throwing their trash into designated trash bins. They don'
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 just dump their litter anywhere. Responsible
tourists
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 make sure that they use the right segregation technique and
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 the designated
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 of the garbage bins.
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disgaree
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disagree
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 those
tourists
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 who
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 care about
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keeping and maintaining the beauty of the tourist destinations. They don'
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 value the idea that many people worked hard to maintain the beauty of their country for
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.
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, they walk on the grass and not
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 the sidewalk. They
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stairs
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 or chairs at the park. The worst part about
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, no one is going to be liable
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 you won'
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 get charged for doing bad. In conclusion, I would have to agree that I can still find some goodness in
tourists
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 who
enjoys
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 the warm embrace of different countries without destroying the environment.

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task response
Make sure your introduction clearly states your position on the topic. This helps the reader understand your view from the start.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'in conclusion' to make your points easier to follow.
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Try to add more examples to support your points. This will make your ideas stronger and clearer.
task achievement
You provided personal experiences, which makes your essay engaging and relatable.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Responsible tourism
  • Cultural preservation
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Off-peak season travel
  • Local economy
  • Carbon offset
  • Waste reduction
  • Wildlife conservation
  • Respecting local customs
  • Cultural erosion
  • Commercialization of cultures
  • Mass tourism
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