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Some people believe that a school teacher’s role is to motivate and inspire their students, however other people think that teacher’s primary role is to simply pass on knowledge so students can pass exams. What do you think is the role of a teacher?

Some People believe that a school
teacher
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's role is to motivate and
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inspire
 their students
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on the other hand
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 , other people think that
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teacher's
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a teacher's
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 role is to simply pass on knowledge.
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,
i
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I
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 believe that
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teacher's
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a teacher's
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 role
not
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is not
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 limited
just
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to just
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in pass
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passing
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 knowledge so students can pass exams,
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teacher's
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but also to
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motivate
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motivating
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 and
inspire
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inspiring
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 their students .
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i
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I
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 am
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inspired
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teacher's
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teachers
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 a lot .
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secondly
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,
todays
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today's
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genertion
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generation
need
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needs
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 their's to
inspire
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be inspired
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 by an adult, like a
teacher
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 is a good example for them. Conclusion, everyone
have
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has
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 and we can not change their ideas.

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Expand on your ideas. Provide more examples and explanations to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Use connecting words to help your essay flow better, like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'in conclusion'.
coherence cohesion
Check for spelling and grammar mistakes to improve clarity, for example, 'inspire' instead of 'inspier'.
task achievement
You have a clear viewpoint about the teacher's role.
coherence cohesion
You made an attempt to structure your essay with an introduction, body, and conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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