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Some people believe that school molds the intellect and skills and not the virtues and attitudes of its students. Do you agree or disagree? Give examples based on your own knowledge and experience

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believe
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 that schools
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 not improved
people
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people's
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behaviours
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. I partially disagree with
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 view because school has a great impact on
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its students
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student
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 both academically and socially. The schools which has a
politicial
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political
 influence on
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their
 students,
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currently
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 a great effort to do their best to improve their
childs
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children
.
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in
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 addition,
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 see a lot of
situation
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situations
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that
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student
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has
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a
discipline
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disciplined
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 by their teachers.
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,
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 had someone who shouted
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 once
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set
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 on their chair
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. when
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when
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 the
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lestend
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listened
 to
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him,
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 he
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correct
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corrected
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 his behaviour by
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 a penalty and
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making
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 him
apologizes
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 for his
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actions
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.
While
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 others think that schools
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do
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 not
a
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have a
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great influence on their
students
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students'
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 behaviours
which
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, which
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 get
worser
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worse
 because of the bad school
society
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environment
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. It all depends on the
teachers
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teachers'
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behave
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behaviour
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which
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supppress
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suppresses
 or
allow
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allows
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 the bad actions. In
another
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 words, there
is
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alot
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a lot
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student
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students
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 because of the worst teachers .Once
i
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have
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 an exam
and
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, and
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 the
student
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 in front of me he trying to see my paper
and
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 the
teacher
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 shouted
on
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 me for no reason. In
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conclusion
, having a bad
teacher
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 or a good
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it is rely
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 on the school administration. If
administration
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the administration
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has monitoring
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 their
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,
then
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 they will have their students
to
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study in a good society.

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Task Response
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. Use clear examples to support your ideas and keep your response focused on the main question.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences to connect your main ideas. Break your points into separate paragraphs for better flow.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to improve your grammar and spelling. Proofread your work to catch small mistakes like 'has' instead of 'have' and 'behaviours' instead of 'behaviour'.
General
You made a good effort to explain your ideas.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intellect
  • skills
  • virtues
  • attitudes
  • development
  • curriculum
  • pedagogy
  • moral values
  • impart
  • extracurricular activities
  • peer pressure
  • empathy
  • teamwork
  • leadership
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