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The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, *20.., and future predictions for 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, *20.., and future predictions for 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart displays the ineternational export of Southland in three years 2000, 20 and predect the future in 2025. 
Overall
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, during the three years Southland's highest exports come from the international
tourisim
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,
while
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meat
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products
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 is the least. The numbers of international
tourisim
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 increased over time,
dairy
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products
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 had fluctuated and
meat
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products
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 exports declined. In 2000 Southland earned about 8 million from international
tourisim
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 and 7
millions
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 from
dairy
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products
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 and the least number that year was from
meat
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 product with 6
millions
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. In 20 the exports of
dairy
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products
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 were 10
millions
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 surpassing both the international
tourisim
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 and
meat
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 product which had 9
millions
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 and around 6
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 respectively. The Highest export's profit in 2025 was for international
tourisim
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 with 10
millions
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 followed by
dairy
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products
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 with just above 9
millions
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,
while
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meat
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products
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 were the least with only 5
millions
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourisim, meat, products, dairy, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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