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The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Fuel type used to generate electricity (%)

The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Fuel type used to generate electricity (%)
The table below shows the percentage utilise of four various
fuel
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 types: Nuclear, Coal & lignite,
Petroleum
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products
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,
Hydro
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 &
wind
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, and other, to generate electricity in five Asian countries (
Malaysia
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,
Singapore
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,
Thailand
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, South
Korea
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, and
Japan
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) in 2005.
Overall
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, the table shows that the least commonly used type of
fuel
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 was
Petroleum
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products
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 in
Malaysia
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,
Singapore
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, South
Korea
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, and
Japan
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. The most commonly used types of
fuel
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 were coal and lignite in
Malaysia
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 and
Singapore
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. For South
Korea
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,
Hydro
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 &
wind
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fuel
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 was used more. For
Thailand
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, Nuclear it was close to zero.
Firstly
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, looking at the data more closely, Nuclear is more popular in
Japan
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, at 49%. The use of Coal & lignite was most significant in
Malaysia
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, at 61%. For
Thailand
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,
Petroleum
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products
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 it was utilised nine-twenty-fifths per cent.
Hydro
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 &
wind
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 were more popular in South
Korea
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, at 48%. Other
fuel
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 types were more popular in
Singapore
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 and
Japan
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, at the same percent to 39
%
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, %
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.
Secondly
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,
in contrast
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, the remaining categories show different trends like Nuclear had no usage in
Thailand
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,
also
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 Coal & lignite were the least popular in
Thailand
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, at 3%.
As well as
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 for
Malaysia
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,
Petroleum
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products
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 it was the least popular, at 2%.
Hydro
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 &
wind
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 least popular in
Singapore
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 and
Japan
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, at 3%. Other
fuel
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 categories, the lowest percentage for South
Korea
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,
to
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at
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 11%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, petroleum, products, hydro, wind, malaysia, singapore, thailand, korea, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • dominant
  • reliance
  • predominantly
  • notable contrast
  • diversity
  • energy mix
  • resource availability
  • economic consideration
  • government policy
  • energy generation
  • percentage
  • fuel types
  • electricity production
  • comparative analysis
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