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The bar chart shows the number of volunteers in New Zealand who helped in sports organizations in 2010. The pie chart illustrates the number of volunteers doing different types of jobs for that same period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The bar chart shows the number of volunteers in New Zealand who helped in sports organizations in 2010. The pie chart illustrates the number of volunteers doing different types of jobs for that same period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The pie chart shows the number of volunteers who helped sports organisations, and the bar graph illustrates the
types
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 of households which contributed to volunteer activities.
Additionally
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, the data was measured in New Zealand
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apply
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 in 2010.
Overall
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, couples who had dependent children were most likely to devote to volunteer programs, and the most popular type of sport support role was
coach
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a coach
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. Specifically, as for household
types
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, percentage distributions were 49.8% (couple and dependent children), 26.9% (couple with no dependent children), 10.9% (
one
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 parent/lone person) and 12.4% (other
types
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).
This
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 information indicates that the distance between the highest category and the lowest
one
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 was approximately 40 percentage points.
On the other hand
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, focusing on several
types
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 of volunteer roles, the number of people who worked as instructors was 206,000.
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, the remaining four roles are referee (98,300), committee member (158,600), scorer or timekeeper (128,000) and medical support or other (62,700). In comparison, the role of instructor was the most famous
one
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 among volunteers,
whereas
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 the least famous
one
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 was medical support. What is more, the difference between them was about 140,000.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words types, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • notable trend
  • actively volunteering
  • early career commitments
  • career stability
  • disposable time
  • community sports activities
  • depicted
  • administration roles
  • demanding nature
  • paperwork and coordination
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