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You are planning a two-week vacation, and need someone to take care of your house while you are away. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: tell your neighbour that you are going away ask your neighbour to take care of your house for you explain what task you would like your neighbour to do

Dear Mr. Brown, As
,
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 I am working full-time.
from
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for
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couple
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a couple
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 of months
causing
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, causing
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 various health problems
tome
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to me
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. So,
me
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and my friends
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my friends and
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decided
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I decided
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 to go on a vacation for almost 2 weeks. I will be out of the city, but
I
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I am really worried. for my house. If I couldn't find anyone, I
have
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 to cancel my plan. I would really appreciate it if you
can
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could
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Look
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look
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 at my home during my absence. I know you are really busy too, but it won't take much time
,
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 and
efforts
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. There are only a few things that I am expecting.
Firstly
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,I painted my room
few
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a few
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 days ago, and the painter told me to keep my windows open throughout the day to avoid odour.
Secondly
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,I planted some flowers
at
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in
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 my backyard. It is crucial to give them water. at least once a day
due to
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hot
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the hot
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 weather. I will be very thankful to you., If you can help me in
this
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 matter. Regards, Ash

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task achievement
Try to write in complete sentences and avoid starting sentences with 'As' or 'So' to improve clarity.
coherence
Make sure to separate your ideas into clear paragraphs, each covering one topic to enhance flow.
coherence
Be careful with your punctuation and capitalization to make your message clearer.
task achievement
The letter introduces the vacation plan clearly and expresses worry about the house.
task achievement
You respectfully ask your neighbor for help, which shows good tone.
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