You have recently moved into a company accommodation and you are facing some issues at the place. Write a letter to your HR department. In the letter, mention: • A brief description of your accommodation. • What problems are you facing? • What do you expect the company to do about it?

Dear Sir/Madam, I am Heta Patel GEM residence.
Its
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been about
to be
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a month
in
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coming
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the coming
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week
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we have some concerns regarding the water supply. The stay is at suite seven block A of
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campus for two years, and I must say that
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the stay
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is fabulous, with four
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bedrooms
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bedroom
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attached restrooms, the suite includes
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laundry and dryer.
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, it is
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statement that I have never
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seen
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this
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ultra-facility based
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ultra-facility-based
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accomodation
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accommodation
.
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However
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there is a small
problem
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regarding the water pressure. As we have tried to manage to increase the pressure of water by regulating some taps,
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then too
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the
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seemed to be persistent.
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Therefore
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we hired a plumber to
figureout
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figure out
the possible solution, but I guess they were not able to catch the issue. Hereby, I kindly request you to look
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this
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into this problem
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problem
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into the consideration as it creates
incoveniency
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inconvenience
to complete the
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chores and
also
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the
last
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week
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laundry is yet left to complete.
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I insist
you
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that you
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to
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take note of it as soon as possible
and
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, and
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if
possible
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possible,
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kindly provide a temporary
another
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apply
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suite till
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problem
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the problem
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gets fixed. I would be grateful if you could process
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request at your earliest convenience, and I appreciate your understanding and support in
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matter. Your sincerely, Heta Patel

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grammar
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. For example, 'accommodation' is misspelled as 'accomodation.'
coherence
Try to separate your ideas more clearly into different paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
task achievement
In the closing, you can mention a specific request more clearly, like 'I would like a response by next week.'
tone
You have used a polite tone throughout the letter, which is good for a formal request.
details
Your description of the accommodation is detailed and gives a clear picture of where you live.
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