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Writing Samples
Band 3

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The predictions illustrate the current airport situation and the future appearance expected after reconstruction next year.
Overall
Linking Words
, in
next
Correct article usage
the next
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 year, the redevelopment of the airport will focus on adding facilities, particularly for
gates
Use synonyms
, shops, a bag drop, another cafe, an ATM, and a
care
Use the right word
car
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 hire.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, the walkway will be
convered
Correct your spelling
converted
 to
sky
Correct article usage
a sky
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 train with
longer
Correct article usage
a longer
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 distance.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the
gates
Use synonyms
 in the future construction
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 considered to be added to 18 in total from 8 at the initial time.
This
Linking Words
 expectation
makes
Wrong verb form
will change
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 the pattern of the top site will be changed to
Y
Correct article usage
a Y
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pattern surrounded by the
gates
Use synonyms
 so that people can easily reach to arrive there.
Moreover
Linking Words
,
In
Fix capitalization
in
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 the middle of
it
Add a comma
it,
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 there will be
sky
Correct article usage
a sky
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 train, replacing the walkway, and new shops will be placed
in
Change preposition
on
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 the left when
go
Wrong verb form
going
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 to the
gates
Use synonyms
 on the way after
of
Change preposition
apply
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the departure doors.
Secondly
Linking Words
, there will be
new four
Correct word order
four new
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 facilities in the future improvement of the airport. After the departures, the cafe and the check-in counters at
the
Correct article usage
apply
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present
time
Check wording
apply
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will be moved because there will be a new bag drop in it. Before people
going
Wrong verb form
go
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 out through the arrival doors, they will be provided
by
Change preposition
with
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 other new necessary places
such
Linking Words
 as, bank and car hire,
as well as
Linking Words
 another cafe.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly compare the current and future layout. This will help highlight the changes more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use linking words, such as 'however', 'moreover', and 'firstly', to connect your ideas better.
task achievement
Provide specific examples from the plans to support your points more effectively.
task achievement
You have identified the main changes clearly, such as the increase in gates and new facilities.
coherence and cohesion
The structure is generally good, with an introduction and body of ideas.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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