IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

are traditional book better than e-books. compare reading digital books. which do you prefer and why

Are
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 better than
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
.
Change the punctuation
?
show examples
 In
this
Linking Words
essay
Add a comma
essay,
show examples
i
Fix capitalization
I
show examples
 will discuss both sides of reading a
paper
Use synonyms
book
Use synonyms
 and
e-
Correct article usage
an e-book
show examples
book
Use synonyms
. Some people think that reading
digital
Correct article usage
a digital
show examples
book
Use synonyms
 is
more easer
Correct word choice
easier
show examples
but
Punctuation problem
, but
show examples
i
Fix capitalization
I
show examples
disagree with
this
Linking Words
 statement.
For
Change preposition
From
show examples
 my
perspectivies
Correct your spelling
perspective
, reading
traditional
Correct article usage
a traditional
show examples
book
Use synonyms
 is
kind
Correct article usage
a kind
show examples
 of
hand-on
Use the right word
hands-on
show examples
 activity
that is
Linking Words
 more flexible who
wants
Correct subject-verb agreement
want
show examples
 to feel the
book
Use synonyms
's pages.
For instance
Linking Words
, my sister
Verb problem
is keens
show examples
keens
Replace the word
keen
show examples
 on
smell
Correct article usage
the smell
show examples
 of
Use synonyms
book
Correct article usage
a book
show examples
 and the feeling of flipping the pages.
Although
Linking Words
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
 it may
seems
Wrong verb form
seem
show examples
 like it is harmful
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
 the
enviroment
Correct your spelling
environment
 because of cutting
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
trees to get the
paper
Use synonyms
.
In addition
Linking Words
, traditional
books
Use synonyms
way
Verb problem
are way
show examples
 more expensive than
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 because
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
show examples
needs
Verb problem
require
show examples
 more supplies. Even though
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
 it can be
carry
Wrong verb form
carried
show examples
 around everywhere you go because it
don't
Correct subject-verb agreement
doesn't
show examples
 need
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 battery
which
Punctuation problem
, which
show examples
is
Verb problem
apply
show examples
only
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
,
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 are
eco friendly
Use the right word
eco-friendly
show examples
 because it doesn't need to cut the trees to get hundreds of
paper
Use synonyms
. If it has
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
battery
Punctuation problem
battery,
show examples
then
Linking Words
 you can enjoy
read
Wrong verb form
reading
show examples
 everywhere. But, it can
be
Verb problem
apply
show examples
distract the
attiention
Correct your spelling
attention
 because it is
more
Fix the agreement mistake
apply
show examples
easier to scroll your phone. If you get
call
Correct article usage
a call
show examples
someone
Change preposition
from someone
show examples
who
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
you really care
then
Linking Words
 eventually you may open the social apps directly. And you stop
read
Wrong verb form
reading
show examples
 and get the information from your head to call it a day.
Also
Linking Words
, the sight of
eyes
Correct article usage
the eyes
show examples
 gradually
get
Correct subject-verb agreement
gets
show examples
 worse if someone
read
Correct subject-verb agreement
reads
show examples
 at
nights
Fix the agreement mistake
night
show examples
 a lot. Scientists discovered that if you read
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
something
Punctuation problem
, something
show examples
 like texts can be worse
Change preposition
for the
show examples
the
Correct pronoun usage
your
show examples
 eyesight. To wrap it up, reading
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
harmful
Verb problem
is harmful
show examples
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
 the trees and more expensive
but
Punctuation problem
, but
show examples
 if you love the
feelings
Fix the agreement mistake
feeling
show examples
 of reading
Use synonyms
books
Punctuation problem
books,
show examples
then
Linking Words
 it is win deal.
Virtaully
Correct your spelling
Virtually
, if you like to read
Use synonyms
e-
Punctuation problem
e-books,
show examples
books
Use synonyms
 it'll
worse
Use the right word
worsen
show examples
 your eyesight but
sightly
Use the right word
slightly
show examples
 friendly for eco
system
Use the right word
ecosystem
show examples
. So it's up to you.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. This helps the reader follow your thoughts better.
task achievement
Work on grammar and spelling to improve clarity. Errors make it harder for readers to understand your points.
task achievement
Add more specific examples to support your points. This will make your arguments stronger and clearer.
task achievement
You clearly express your opinion on the topic, which is important in an essay.
task achievement
You compare both sides of the argument, showing that you understand multiple perspectives.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: