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The map below show the cahnges that have taken in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962

The map below show the cahnges that have taken in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962
The three maps illustrate how
Meadowside
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 village and
Fonton
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, which is a nearby town, have developed from 1962 to the present.
Overall
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, both
Fonton
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 and
Meadowside
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village
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villages
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 increased in size over the years until they eventually merged together, at which point
Meadowside
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 became a suburb.
Furthermore
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, there have been significant changes to infrastructure, housing and facilities over the period given. In 1962, both
Meadowside
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 and
Fonton
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 were completely separate
with
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, with
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 no roads or rail connecting them.
While
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Fonton
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 had a railway line running to the north,
Meadowside
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, located to the west of
Fonton
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, only had a small
road
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 from the west. By 1985,
Meadowside
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 had expanded
and
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, and
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 the small
road
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 had become a main
road
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. A
further
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 main
road
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 had been built to connect the village to
Fonton
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. Within
Meadowside
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, a superstore, leisure complex and housing estate had been developed. By
this
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 time,
Fonton
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 had
also
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 grown in size. Currently,
Meadowside
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 is known as
Meadowside
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 Suburbs after joining with
Fonton
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. Between both places, a hotel,
station
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a station
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 and
business
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a business
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 park have been built on either side of the railway line.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meadowside, fonton, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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