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Band 1

Some people believe that governments should invest more in public transportation instead of building new roads for cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
There us some
people
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think
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who think
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 that governments should be founded on public
transportation
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l
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. l
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believe that important in
the
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apply
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infustructare
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infrastructure
 of roads needs more focus.
Body paragraph 1
on
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On
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 the
hand
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one hand
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 ,some
people
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 expect that
government
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the government
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improveing
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improve
road
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roads
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 and
highway
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highways
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beause
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because
 it's
benfits
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beneficial
 for the
people
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 and society. One of the main there would be no traffic
inaddition
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addition
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, accident
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accident
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accidents
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 around the world
is
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are
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 increasing
beause
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because
the
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of the
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 poor condition of roads
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. .afther
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.afther
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After
 searching
it
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, it
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 was found that road instructor is for
accident
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accidents
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.
Body paragraph 2
Linking Words
on
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On
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 the other hand, the government focusing on public
transportation
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 is
environment
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environmentally
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 beneficial
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, useing
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useing presonal
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using personal
 cars
produce
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produces
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alot
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a lot
 of diachronic whter public
transportation
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 great fewer realtively the bus .
Conclusion
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In inconclusion
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inconclusion
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conclusion
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,
l
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I
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belive
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believe
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 that
government
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the government
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 should
be
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apply
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invest more
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in puplic
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puplic
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public
transportation
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 rather than building new roads
fir
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for
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 cars
Linking Words
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. this
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this
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This
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 helps control the traffic and issues
and
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, and
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people
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 have
healthy
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a healthy
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 life.

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Task Achievement
Your main points need to be clearer and more developed. Try to explain your ideas in more detail and support them with examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure your sentences flow logically from one to the next. Use linking words like 'firstly,' 'however,' and 'finally' to connect your ideas better.
Overall Writing
Check for spelling and grammar mistakes. Errors can make your ideas hard to understand, so proofread your work carefully.
Task Achievement
You have taken a clear position in your essay, stating your agreement with investing in public transportation.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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