Some people believe that governments should invest more in public transportation instead of building new roads for cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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people
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think
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who think
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that governments should be founded on public
transportation
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believe that important in
the
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apply
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infustructare
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infrastructure
of roads needs more focus.
on
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the
hand
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,some
people
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expect that
government
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the government
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improveing
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improve
road
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roads
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and
highway
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highways
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beause
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because
it's
benfits
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beneficial
for the
people
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and society. One of the main there would be no traffic
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addition
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accident
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accidents
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around the world
is
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increasing
beause
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because
the
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poor condition of roads
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.afther
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it
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was found that road instructor is for
accident
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accidents
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.
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on
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the other hand, the government focusing on public
transportation
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is
environment
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environmentally
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beneficial
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, useing
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useing presonal
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using personal
cars
produce
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produces
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alot
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a lot
of diachronic whter public
transportation
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great fewer realtively the bus .
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inconclusion
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conclusion
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,
l
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belive
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believe
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that
government
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the government
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should
be
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apply
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invest more
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in puplic
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puplic
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public
transportation
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rather than building new roads
fir
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for
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cars
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. this
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this
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helps control the traffic and issues
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people
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have
healthy
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a healthy
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life.

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Task Achievement
You have taken a clear position in your essay, stating your agreement with investing in public transportation.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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