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Band 4.5

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

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work
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week
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 is legislated
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hours
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, often
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spread
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hours
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day
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considering
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chenged
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changed
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, the
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 matter of
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week
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extensions
tend
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 to be a controversial topic in
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the social
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 and governmental arena.
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 is a thesis
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that
 suggests
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 matter needs to be reconsidered
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 even
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a limited
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work
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week
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 plan can be
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compatible
 with
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the level
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 of stuff's burden. I am
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strangely
agree
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in agreement
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 with
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 point of view and
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 will explain my
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reasons
 in the coming paragraph. The
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8-hour
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 movement
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occurred
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 the middle of
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the nintheenth
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nintheenth
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nineteenth
 century and led societies to regulate their
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 with equal 8
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 for 3 activities
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:
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work
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, recreation and rest.
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 now
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 around two centuries
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, many
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 issues in social,
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economic
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, cultural, and
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occupation
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 contexts have changed
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 we need to reconsider
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such
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 old legislations and transform them to a more compatible version with
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the contemporary
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 context. All integral parts of vocational context are changed or
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at least
 are
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 the verge of transformation,
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instance
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instance,
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 job titles,
stuff's
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staff's
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burdun
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burden
 and responsibilities, amenities and
equipments
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equipment
, and meeting objectives approaches.
in
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this
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status
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status,
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persist
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persisting
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 in keeping one part under
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the dominance
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 of old
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decisions
 can lead
orgenasations
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organisations
 towards
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failure
.
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Furthermore
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 modern
life style
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lifestyle
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 is
associeted
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associated
 with
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a huge
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 amount of stress and ... for dwellers and providing more rest
time
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 for
labours
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labourers
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 can help them to
increas
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increase
 the level of their physical and mental health by spending more
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 with their family and beloved ones and
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 doing leisure activities. These relaxing schemes have
its
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their
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 beneficial edges for employers too
with
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, with
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 improving their
stuffs
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 productivity and more efficient
work
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time
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. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 I believe reconsidering
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work
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the work
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week
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 and
reset
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resetting
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 it based on novel social needs can
be
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apply
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lead to both employers and employees
saticfiction
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satisfaction
 and benefits.

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Task Achievement
Your introduction is somewhat unclear, making it hard to understand your main point. Try to clearly state your opinion in a simple sentence.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have mixed some ideas, making it difficult to follow. Use clear paragraphs for each main point. This will help the reader understand your thoughts better.
Task Achievement
Add more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention studies or cases showing how a shorter work week has helped workers.
Positive Comment
You show a good understanding of the topic and provide reasons for your viewpoint.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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