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There is a sports stadium near your home where large number of people come to watch games each weekend. This cause you and your neighbours some problems. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter- -explain who you are and where you live -describe the problem -suggest what the local council should do

Dear sir I am writing
this
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 letter to report the
inconvience
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inconvenience
 caused by the visitors who come to watch the games each weekend . My name is Lucy,
i
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I
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 live with my old parents
in
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at
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 201 Roosevelt Blvd, Halifax
which
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 is just next to the sports
statium
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stadium
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 with, there are
alot
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a lot
 of folks who come to watch the game every weekend and their a serious littering happening around the houses close to it.
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 , people park their vehicles in front of our houses and it
make
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 it really hard to come in and go out,
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furthermore
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furthermore,
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 they park in front of the bus station too
making
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, making
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 it impossible for the neighbourhood to use the local transport system. As a request from all of us , sign boards
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explaining
 the laws can be placed
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 cameras can be fixed for
monitoring
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the monitoring
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 process
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 punishments can be applied
on
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to
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law breakers. Thanks in advance
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 looking forward
for
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to
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necessary
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the necessary
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 action yours sincerely Lucy

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task achievement
Try to make sure your grammar and spelling is correct. For example, 'inconvience' should be 'inconvenience'.
coherence and cohesion
Use full sentences to describe each problem clearly. This helps with understanding.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to start the letter formally and close it properly. ‘Dear Sir’ and ‘Yours sincerely’ are good, but check punctuation.
task achievement
Provide more details about the problems so the council understands the needs better. For example, how does littering affect you?
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You clearly stated who you are and where you live. This is good for the local council to know who is writing.
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You made suggestions on how to solve the problems, which shows you are thinking about solutions.
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