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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You had a meeting with many jobseekers in a hotel and you were dissaisfied with your stay write a letter to meeting organizer, In your letter; # Provide the detailsof yout meeting # Explain what you ere dissatisfied with # suggest what the hotel should do to resilve issue You have 20 minutes

Dear Mr. Wiiliams, I am writing
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 letter to express my sheer dissatisfaction regarding my recent stay at your establishment I am Steve, a manager of the Hilton branch office of RBC Bank. I attended my company's annual general meeting in your hotel
and
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, and
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 my stay was planned for the 23rd and 24th of
last
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 month. Unfortunately, I was discontent with several aspects of my stay, and I feel it is imperative to bring these issues to your attention.
Firstly
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, hygiene was not taken care of at all because two towels and the only bed sheets provided were dirty and
stinky
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smelly
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.
Additionally
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, the room's air conditioning system was faulty, making it uncomfortable, especially during the warmer hours of the day. On top of
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, the Wi-Fi service was erratic my ability to prepare for the meeting and stay connected with our team.
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, I called the hotel staff to solve the ongoing concern
,
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however
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, they turned
deaf
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a deaf
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ears
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ear
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 to my request. To rectify
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 situation, I would like to suggest that the hotel should ensure their rooms are thoroughly cleaned before guests check in, and that any faulty systems , like air conditioning,
be
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are
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 promptly repaired I hope these issues can be addressed to ensure a more pleasant experience for guests in future. I appreciate your attention to
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 matter. Yours sincerely, Ozguc Dalga

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to follow a clear structure in your paragraphs.
task achievement
Provide more detailed examples for your issues to strengthen your points.
task achievement
Use more polite phrases to express dissatisfaction.
task achievement
You included clear details about your stay and the issues you faced.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a proper greeting and closing, which is good.
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