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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates,
step
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step
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step-by-step
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recycline
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recycling
process
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 for plastic
bottles
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.
Overall
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, there are nine steps in total for
this
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process
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starting
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, starting
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 with collecting
bottles
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 into the bins and ending with producing several
items
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with recycle
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through the recycling
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process
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.
Firstly
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, it starts with putting
items
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 in
specific
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a specific
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 bin only for
bottles
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 since it is easier to collect all of them separately.
second
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The second
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step
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 is to collect bins and transport
it
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them
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 using trucks
into
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to
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recycling
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the recycling
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center
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centre
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. In the next
step
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, warehouse workers try to separate
items
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 as
re-usable
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reusable
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 and
non-usable
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non-reusable
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 following
guidlines
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guidelines
 given.
Next
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The next
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step
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 is compressing all the
re-usable
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reusable
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bottles
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 into blocks and
then
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,
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apply
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crushed
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crushing
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blocks
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the blocks
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 using machines and collecting
crushed
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the crushed
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 pieces into tubs filled with water for
cleaning
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the cleaning
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process
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Furthermore
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, after
washing
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washing,
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 crushed pieces
put
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are put
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 into a machine for
production
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the production
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 of plastic pellets . In the seventh
step
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, heat pellets to form raw material using the same
maching
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machine
 used in
previous
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the previous
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step
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. After
,
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apply
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tranforming
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transforming
 pellets into raw materials,
items
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such
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 as
bottles
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, plastic boxes, t-shirts and recycling bags are made as the
last
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step
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 of the
process
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.
Moreover
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, these products are recycled by people and
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process
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the process
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 is going to start from the
begining
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beginning
.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words step, process, bottles, items with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recycling process
  • Disposal
  • Collection
  • Sorting
  • Cleaning
  • Contaminants
  • Recycling center
  • Plastic flakes
  • Melting
  • Re-shaping
  • Raw materials
  • Transformation
  • Repurposing
  • End products
  • Variety
  • Sustainability
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