the chart below shows the percentage of people aged 23-65 in different occupations in one UK town (Ashby) and in the UK as a whole in 2008

the chart below shows the percentage of people aged 23-65 in different occupations in one UK town (Ashby) and in the UK as a whole in 2008
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the chart below shows the percentage of people aged 23-65 in different occupations in one UK town (Ashby) and in the UK as a whole in 2008
The pie charts compare the employment status of people aged 23-65, in
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and in the UK, in 2008.
Overall
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, the national unemployment rate was lower than the rate in
Ashby
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.
Moreover
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, most British people worked in office jobs,
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personal service was the most popular profession in the town. The percentage of unemployment in
Ashby
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's residents was 14%,
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in the whole nation it was only 10%. The percentage of
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's residents who worked in office jobs was 18% and 14% in shops. These figures are similar to the national percentages of 19% and 13% respectively.
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, technical and professional occupations in the town were the least popular at approximately 9% and 8%.
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, the rate of technical and professional employees in the UK is around 17% and 14%.
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, personal services were the most popular employment sector in the town at 21% compared to 17% in the UK. The percentage of people working in construction was around 16% in
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and was much lower at 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words ashby with synonyms.
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