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Band 4

A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •give contact details for when you are away •give instructions on how to care for your pet •describe other household duties

Dear Amrit, How are you? I hope you've been well. I'd like to tell you that I am glad that you are willing
take
Verb problem
to take
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 care of my home and pet
while
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 I am going back to India to visit my family. You are a true example
of
Correct pronoun usage
that of
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 friend in need is a friend indeed. Actually, I wanted to give you the contact details of my sister, you can reach her by calling her phone number 6479872100, who can stay at
house
Use the right word
home
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 when you have any
urgency
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urgency,
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 as I know who have a family
ta
Use the right word
to
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 take care
as
Change preposition
of as
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 well.
Additionally
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, I bought the dog food for
next
Correct article usage
the next
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 whole month and you can find it in
drawer
Correct article usage
the drawer
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 near the sink in
kitchen
Correct article usage
the kitchen
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. Shadow, my
pet
Punctuation problem
pet,
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 is
fenomenal
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phenomenal
, he won't bark like other dogs, and he is very friendly as well. Make sure to feed him thrice a day and give
water
Correct pronoun usage
him water
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 every two hours, and you can take him for a walk once in the morning and once in the evening. I know you are an
explemlary
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exemplary
 person, but as everyone's house is
little
Correct article usage
a little
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 different so I would like to give you some instructions so
that
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is
Correct pronoun usage
it is
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 easy for you.
Firstly
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, all the basic species to cook food are in the first drawer on
right
Correct article usage
the right
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 when you enter the kitchen, and you can sleep in my bedroom because the other room's air conditioning is not working. Once again, thank you so much for helping me out. I can't wait
see
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to see
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 you before I leave. Your friend, Simran

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to organize your letter clearly, so each part has its own paragraph. For example, one paragraph for your pet care instructions and another for household duties.
task achievement
Try to use correct spelling for words like 'phenomenal' and 'exemplary' to improve your writing. Check for any minor errors before finishing your letter.
suitable writing tone
You have a warm tone and express gratitude, which makes your letter friendly and sincere.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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