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The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figures provide data in regard to a particular library; its
members
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members'
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 age rate,
categorized
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categorised
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 loaned
books
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 based on
contents
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, and loaners number.
the
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The
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 graph concerns total loaners between 2007 and 2016;
that
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which
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overally
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overall
grown
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 from around 16000 in 2007 to around 22000
member
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members
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 in 2016.
it
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It
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 experienced
an
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 steady growing trend except
2013
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in 2013
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 with went through a marginal
falling
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 by
loosing
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 around 700 members. The pie chart focuses on members age rate in 2016 and highlights
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adults
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that adults
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 are by far the
most great
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greatest
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 group of
loaners
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borrowers
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 by 51%
and
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apply
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this
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 followed by
childeren
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children
 and teenagers by 22% and 15% respectively. Interestingly, elderly people were at least
point
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as likely
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of
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as
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 book readers with just 12%. The table shows the contents and their popularity;
pointout
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point out
 children and adult fiction were by far the most
in-favor
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gener
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genre
 that was followed by adult non-fiction and
childeren
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children's
 non-fiction
books
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 by 13% and 6% popularity respectively. other schemes
namely
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, namely
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, young
adults
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,
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adults
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adults,
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 audio
books
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 and children's DVDs
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, states
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states
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state
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 with just under 2%.
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to
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To
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 sum
up
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 demand for loaning
books
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 grew by
2016
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2016,
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an
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and
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at
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in
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2016
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2016,
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adults
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was
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were
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 the main
audiance
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audience
 of loaning by
lenting
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lending
 fiction
schems
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schemes
 from Chalfon library.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, adults with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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