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Band 1

As technology is used more in the workplace, some people tend to believe that young people can find jobs more easily than older people. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Technology is very
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common
 now, and as we can
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 young
people
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then
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people
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,
workplace
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the workplace
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is needed
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needs
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 more
technlogy
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technology
 and modern tools to make the work easier
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instead
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manual
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a manual
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 system. old
people
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 and young both of them they need to learn and due the huge speed of techology tools they need to learn in
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apply
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quick
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way
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. On the
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other
 hand, old
people
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then
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younge
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young
people
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However
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,
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 has been noticed that during
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the last
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yeas
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years
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 old
people
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 struggle with new
technology
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technology,
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this
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which
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 may
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impact
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company
.
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 lack of
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knowledge
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lead to
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resignation
 from work.
To sum up
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belive
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believe
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 in young generations
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because
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are very
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commitnmnt
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commitment
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there
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their
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 work and
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they have
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a
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apply
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self-confident
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self-confidence
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Make sure to write a clear introduction that shows your opinion about the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Try to have better linking words between sentences and paragraphs to make your ideas clearer.
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Include more specific examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar, as there are many errors that make it hard to read.
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You have a clear opinion that young people can find jobs easier.
coherence and cohesion
You covered both sides of the argument, which is good.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • workplace
  • young people
  • older people
  • skills
  • attractive
  • employers
  • modern tools
  • software
  • adaptable
  • experience
  • problem-solving
  • benefit
  • mix
  • environment
  • values
  • skills
  • driven
  • tendency
  • capable
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