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Present a written argument to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.

In the coming years, we will see many
changes
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 in communication methods,
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 social media and smart phone and smart homes in our daily life.I strongly believe these
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 will human brain for many things in our lives.
This
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 argument will talk about the
changes
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 that have occurred in our world.
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 , after covid-19 many
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 it happened in education all class in school and university closed and it turned home "online class" many students and teachers dos't like that in the beginning and they lost their spirit of life outside, but
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countries
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 have made life easier with technologh example of, Saudi Arabia has been ahead of the other counntries in providing many facilities during home quarantinne.
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,after
covid
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, many opportunities
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 in people , and
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their
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the development of medicine in many
countries
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.
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,the growth of globalisation
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 creates more job opportunities and cultural exchange among
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.
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 it is women's choice to build a family and
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countries
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,
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 men give their women's decision whether to be part of the world.
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 the question,many
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happened
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have happened
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 and will happen in the future , leading to a clear and better environment .
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,all developments that happen in the future will change the world ,
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 as the evolution of
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governments and the human mind.

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The introduction needs to clearly state the main points you will discuss. Make sure to introduce the topic and your argument more clearly.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to connect your ideas better. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and flow smoothly to the next.
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Provide specific examples and details to support your points. For instance, explain how smart homes will affect daily life.
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You have good examples, like the changes in education due to COVID-19. This makes your argument more relatable and understandable.
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You touched on important issues like globalization and women's choices, which are relevant to future changes.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • change
  • energy
  • communication
  • environment
  • education
  • globalization
  • opportunity
  • growth
  • relationship
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