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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into the categories, from 1995 to 2002

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into the categories, from 1995 to 2002
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Analysing
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 the information here reveals a lot of points. The provided bar chart
show
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shows
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 the total number of minutes in billions of telephone calls
In
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in
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 the
uk
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UK
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. It is surprising to notice that there is a sharp rise in 2002 .
Here
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Here,
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 a reader can see that there is a similarity between national and
mobiles
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mobile
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in
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In
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2002
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2002,
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 it is clearly seen that there is a slow increase in 2000 of mobile
calls
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calls,
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 as the graph shows.
To sum up
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. If we hold
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a comprison
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comprison
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comparison
 dealing with shows of telephone calls in the
uk
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UK
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,divided into
the
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apply
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categories
,
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from 1995 to 2002 , we can conclude that there is a big
deffrence
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difference
 between them.

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