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The devices people use to watch television in Canada. The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Years Compared: 2009 2019 Device Usage in 2009: Conventional TV: 34% Laptop: 20% Flat-screen TV: 18% Desktop computer: 8% Mobile phone: 15% Tablet: 5% Device Usage in 2019: Mobile phone: 26% Laptop: 27% Flat-screen TV: 12% Tablet: 19% Conventional TV: 4% Desktop computer: 12%

The devices people use to watch television in Canada. The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Years Compared: 2009 2019 Device Usage in 2009: Conventional TV: 34% Laptop: 20% Flat-screen TV: 18% Desktop computer: 8% Mobile phone: 15% Tablet: 5% Device Usage in 2019: Mobile phone: 26% Laptop: 27% Flat-screen TV: 12% Tablet: 19% Conventional TV: 4% Desktop computer: 12%
The pie charts
provides
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 information about the smart devices that adults in the 18- 25 age group use
them
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to watch television in the years 2009 and 2019. The units are measured in percentage.
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, it is clear from the graph that the difference in the
usage
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 way between the two years is huge
,
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, the
usage
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in
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of
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 flat-screen
TV
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TVs
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 had a significant increase,
whereas
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 in
tablet
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the tablet
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 category decreased considerably.
According to
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 what is shown, desktop computer
usage
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 dropped,
was
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initially
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at
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 18%,
then
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 it declined rapidly by almost a third to become 12 % in 2019. The
usage
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in
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of
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 conventional TV and flat
screen-TV
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had grew
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 noticeably to more than trouble compared to the beginning
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in
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In
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2009
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2009,
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 they were 5 % and 8 %, and in
2019
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2019,
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 they
raised
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rose
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 to 19% and 27% respectively. In terms of
labtop
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laptops
, it decreased to around
a
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half of its market share, it had at 20 % in 2009 and in 2019 dropped
at
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to
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 12 %.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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