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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017,
who
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apply
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categorized
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categorised
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visitors
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by visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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, staying on
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island
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the island
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, and the total
number
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 of
visitors
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the graph that the total
number
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 of
visitors
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show
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shows
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a sharply
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sharply increased
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sharp increase
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 over the period
but
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, but
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 the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 and staying
in
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on
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island
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the island
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 grew gradually.
Firstly
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, at the beginning of the period, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 started at approximately 0.2
million
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, it fluctuated throughout the
year
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and
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, and
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cruise
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ships
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 increased relatively and reached 0.5
million
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 after a
year
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. After
that
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that,
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 it fell to
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an initially
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initially
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initial
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 rate in 2012,
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at
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and at
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 the end of the
year
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 was
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 rise and reached 2
million
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visitors
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.
However
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 started more than staying on
cruise
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ships
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 at about 0.7
million
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but
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, but
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 by
end
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the end
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 of the
year
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 reached 1.5
million
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.
Secondly
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,
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 the
number
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 of total
visitors
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 began
1
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at 1
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millions
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million
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 in 2010, until 2015, it dramatically rose
around
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to around
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 2.7
million
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. Total
visitors
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 remained stable at approximately 2.7
million
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 between 2015 and 2016.
Again
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Again,
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 it
was
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apply
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dramatically rose and reached 3.5
million
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 in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors, cruise, ships, number, million, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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