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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph gives information about the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 who travel to a specific Caribbean
island
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 over a seven-year
period
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the graph that the total
number
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 of tourists who stay on
cruise
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ships
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 or on islands during their travels increased significantly and steadily over the given
period
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. Indeed, the
number
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 of passengers grew rapidly and eventually surpassed not only the
island
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 but
also
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cruise
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visitors
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 .
Further
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 significant justification is that the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who stayed on
cruise
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ships
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 breaks through the total figure of
visitors
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 on the
island
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.
Firstly
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, during the given
period
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, the
number
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 of tourists’ accommodation located on islands was more than
visitors
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 who tend to stay on
cruise
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ships
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 , about 0.4
million
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 (
island
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 about 0.7
million
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,
cruise
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ships
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 approximately 0.3). One of the obvious changes happened between 2011 and 2015 about 1.5
million
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visitors
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.
However
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 was much lower than ship-based accommodations, about one
million
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, but
at the end
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 of the given
period
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, the
number
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 of accommodations located on the
island
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 outweighed
cruise
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 ship types.
On the other hand
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, despite the fact that the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 fluctuated over a seven-year
period
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, it faced not only a decrease in the
number
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 of tourists but
also
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 an increase. From 2010 to 2015, the total figure of
visitors
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 rocketed to about 1.7
million
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 , but after that, until 2016, it remained constant.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, period, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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