Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

People
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face
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of whether to do hazardous
sports
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independently or
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whether such
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types of activities should be restricted by authorities. I tend to believe that no one should interfere
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others
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others'
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decisions as long as
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these types
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type
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of activities do not pose a threat to their
life
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. On the one hand,
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some proponents
government
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should restrict doing every single
type
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of sport that
people
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want. One of the obvious reasons is that supporters of
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view believe that
people
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will damage their health, even without being any chance to return their past health or lifestyle.
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, it is not worth their
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and emotions.
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, in Azerbaijan
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few weeks ago woman who was skydiving carried a certain degree of risks, and doing
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stunt
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ended up with her death.
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some
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doubt that it was fully her fault, she did not have to rely on equipments, others state that
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situation was not her fault, and only
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who offer
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sort of sport should be criticised.
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significant justification is that
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government
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the government
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should set aside money for
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situations
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it is undeniable that
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lead
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leads
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to negative outcomes on
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budgets.
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, if
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government
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the government
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restricts outdoor
sports
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,
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the positive
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sides outweigh
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the negative
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sides.
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, I am of the opinion that
people
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all over the world have their own rights of freedom. If
people
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’s
life
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is monotonous,
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some patterns
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their
life
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, they can easily
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become interested
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in
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type
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types
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of activities.
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,
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kind of
sports
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require extensive training, legal licensing, which help reduce the danger involved.
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, mountain climbers often require
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type
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of access and equipment before trying
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hazardous
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a hazardous
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sport activity.
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, proponents of
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perspective argue that rather than banning these
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, governments should focus on ensuring that
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the regulation
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of safety is
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well-regulated
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. In conclusion,
while
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other
people
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state about banning outdoor
sports
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, I believe that
instead
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of
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that,
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the
government
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should set aside more money from the budget for being sure about
people
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’s safety.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly present your main ideas in separate paragraphs.
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Add more specific examples to support your ideas.
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Give a stronger conclusion that clearly states your opinion again.
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The essay discusses both views well, showing understanding of different opinions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • severe injuries
  • fatalities
  • base jumping
  • bull running
  • extreme skiing
  • safeguard
  • well-being
  • regulating
  • avoidable harm
  • healthcare costs
  • burdening
  • personal freedom
  • autonomy
  • training
  • equipment
  • mitigated
  • personal satisfaction
  • mental health benefits
  • resilience
  • adventure
  • assess risks
  • public safety
  • unnecessary healthcare costs
  • outright bans
  • balanced approach
  • stringent safety standards
  • mandatory training sessions
  • adequately informed
  • safeguarding
  • public health
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