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The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the number of
students
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 who studied in four countries –
Asia
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, Africa, Europe and North America during a 20-year period (from 1995 to 2015). In general, the trends of all individuals increased, with the exception of Africa, which saw a fall over the era.
Additionally
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,
Asia
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 was the dominant trend,
whereas
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 North America was the third most popular tendency among countries, and Europe
was
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dominated after
Asia
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 over the era.
According to
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 details,
Asia
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 was the only country that increased over a 20-year period. At the beginning of the date, it was roughly 60
students
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 and
went
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 up to nearly 90, respectively, in the middle of the date.
Then
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, it reached to peak in 2015, from 90 to 120 individuals. Turning to North America, the trend stayed unchanged in the first five years,
about
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with about
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 40 youngsters. After that, it decreased slightly to just below 40 in 2005.
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, it peaked
at the end
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 of the
date
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day
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 with approximately 70
students
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. Starting with Europe, it fluctuated a little but not much. It started with nearly 50
students
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, and after some fluctuations, it reached to peak
just
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of just
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 below 60
students
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, and in the end, it ended with the same
as
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number as
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 in the initial year.
According to
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 what is shown, Africa began with 20
students
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 and it was not changed till the middle of the period,
then
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 it peaked in 2010, about 30 individuals, and eventually, ended with just 20.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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