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The table shows the changes in carbon production in four countries from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the changes in carbon production in four countries from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 the information here reveals a lot of points . The table shows the changes in
carbon
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production
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 in four countries from 1995 to 1999 . It is surprising to notice that there is a sharp rise in
carbon
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production
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 . Here , a reader can deduce that there is a difference between
USA
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 and Germany in 1975 . It is clearly seen that there is a fast increase in
carbon
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production
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production,
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 as the table shows .
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Furthermore
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 there was
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a decreased
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decreased
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 in Germany and
and
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another
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other
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 countries ,
this
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 show that
also
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was
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shows
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a decreased
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decreased
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 in years in 1990 .
To sum up
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, if we hold a comparison dealing with
shows
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the changes in
carbon
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production
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 in four countries from 1995 to 1999 , we can conclude that there is a big difference between them . To illustrate
the
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 highest
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USA
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the USA
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was
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in 2005
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 the lowest was in India in 1975 .

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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