Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time.

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where creatures are kept in an unnatural environment should be banned in

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century.

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essay totally agrees with

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statement because

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that live in these

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are more likely to develop psychological disorders compared to their peers, and nature programs allow us to view

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without the need for a zoo. Most

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that are kept in

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suffer from mental problems. There is an increasing number of deaths in

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all over the world

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a lack of food. But what does

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have to do with our topic? Well, WOAH has recently reported that these deaths were mainly caused by the psychological problems of the

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, they didn't eat, and that has led to their death. The second main reason is that high-quality documentaries remove our need to see

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in captivity.

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high-quality screens , and programmers are now able to offer us a very intimate glimpse of

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in their natural habitat.

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, we can get a better insight into the lives of wild

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by staying at home.

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, the BBC recently produced a series called Life in the Undergrowth , which allowed us to understand the lives of insects in stunning high definition. (I have no conclusion at the moment)

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Add a conclusion to summarize your main points and give your final opinion.

coherence and cohesion

Make sure to connect your ideas more clearly. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally'.

task achievement

You provide specific examples, like the BBC series, which helps to support your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

222 words

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Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time.

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Organized tours to remote areas and communities are increasingly popular. Is it a positive or negative development for the local people and the environment?

You have bougt some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email give detalis of the purchase describe the problem explain why you need a replacement urgently