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The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend Do you agree or disagree?

It is said that there ought to be
less
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fewer
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 working
and
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days and
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 more
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week days
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weekends
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.
This
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 essay strongly disagrees with
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 statement, for
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 trend might cause some issues in civil and economic terms.
Firstly
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, there are some workers whose jobs are highly important to the public. Doctors,
in particular
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, are the ones who are needed the most. In some European countries like Iceland or Germany, citizens usually
work
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 only four days a
week
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. Many a doctor, after finishing his or her
work
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 on Thursday, only gets back to the workplace on
Mondays
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Monday
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. When a physician is absent, more often than not, an unskilled nurse or a recent med school graduate might be a "substitute". Potentially,
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 can adversely impact the health of individuals getting treatments at
the
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apply
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weekends. In Tajikistan,
for instance
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, newly born offsprings lose their lives in maternity clinics
due to
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 the incompetence of
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replacing" on weekdays
nurses
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.
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, reducing the duration of the working
week
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 can have a negative effect on the economy. Representatives of certain professions get paid
according to
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 the number of hours they
work
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 during a
week
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 means that the less an individual works, the less the amount of his or her salary is. Teachers in my country
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, Uzbekistan
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Uzbekistan
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Uzbekistan,
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 they are paid money for each hour they
have taught
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 in a month. Should they
work
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 only four days a
week
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, their incomes may well decrease significantly,
having
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 a tremendous strain on the family budget. On a larger scale, it can
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 affect people with other occupations, thereby hurting the state's economy.
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, shortening the length of
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 is not recommended owing to the potential damage it can have on people's well-being, both physical and financial.

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coherence and cohesion
Make your main points clearer. You can use phrases like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' to guide the reader.
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Add a few more specific examples to help support your ideas better.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use simpler sentences to make your ideas easy to follow.
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Your introduction clearly states your main opinion against a shorter working week.
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You provide strong examples like doctors and teachers to support your points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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