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As a global trade increase, many goods including those we use on a daily basis are producing in another country and have to be transported long distances. Do benefits of this trend outweigh disadvantages?

Nowadays, the import of products that we use in our daily routine has increased significantly from overseas. I will discuss the desire
for sending
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 products to other countries
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 and how it helps their development. One of the keys to transporting products is investigating the factories that produce
goods
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. Export is an industry
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 which helps every country to develop
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 and become independent.
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, international
transact
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 can improve
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 environment
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 growth.
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, it is crucial to transport
goods
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 to a far country because it provides the highest proof.
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, the government will try to expand their factories to have the highest quality in each product.
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 when they invest in industries, it will be helpful for individuals financially.
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, the drawbacks should not be overlooked.
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 all things that folk consume are harmful. Most importantly,
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, a variety of people will lose their jobs because of it. So, the government will face unemployed individuals .
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,
goods
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 will be consumed only by people.
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 will be loose. It is obvious that countries require on their export than imports.
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, the government must weigh these pros and cons to make the most effective
desicion
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decision
 for their people.
Exchanching
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Exchanging
goods
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make
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 a good platform for using other
countries
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product
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products
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. That would be
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perfect for new businesses that will be established by
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export.

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Make sure each paragraph has one clear main idea with supporting points.
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Use simple transitions like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' to help with flow.
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Clarify your main ideas with clearer examples and explanations.
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Ensure that your conclusion clearly restates your main points.
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You have identified both the benefits and drawbacks of global trade, showing a balanced view.
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Your ideas are relevant to the topic of global trade and its impacts.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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