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In many countries, there is a shortage of qualified teachers, especially in rural areas. What are the causes of this problem, and what can be done to solve it?

Many remote towns suffer from
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 lack of qualified instructors.
This
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teachers
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 do not prefer to
work
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 in rural areas
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 the difficulties of living
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, and suggests that education
officitals
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officials
 should motivate them by building good houses and
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increasing
 their salary. Most people do not like to
work
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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 because the
life
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quality in these
places
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are
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is
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 not as good as in cities. There are no advanced hospitals
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neither
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nor
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or
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nor
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 even any
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 to spend free time at.
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, it is not easy to find a nice place to live in as the number of houses is low.
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, many people refuse job offers in remote
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 because they
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 find a place to stay
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. There are many viable solutions that governments can
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 to address
this
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 problem. One of them is that they can provide the
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basic
 services for
teachers
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such
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 as appropriate housing and cover the high
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transportation
 fees. They can
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 pay more to
teachers
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 who
work
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 in rural
places
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 as another motivation.
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, the
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Ministry
 of
education
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 in Saudi Arabia
pay
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pays
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extra
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an extra
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 1000 dollars as
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a financial
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motive
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incentive
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 to instructors who teach in
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remote towns
. In conclusion, highly qualified
teachers
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 tend to refuse to
work
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 in
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the contryside
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contryside
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countryside
 as these
places
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 lack the prime services like healthcare centres and good housing.
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, authorities can attract those people by providing
essntial
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essential
 services and paying higher salaries.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly outline your main points in the introduction. This will help guide the reader through your essay.
coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
Try to provide more examples or explanations to support your points.
task achievement
You identified some good causes for the shortage of teachers.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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