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The diagrams show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams illustrate the evidence of Queen Mary Hospital, which was constructed in 1960, and
showed
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 the comparison in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, we can see that the location of Main Road, which is located in the
nothern
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northern
 part of the map, and the
size
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 of Queen Mary Hospital remained the same during the periods. Shopping
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centre
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centres
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 and farmland were transformed into medical use buildings,
such
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 as
cancer
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a cancer
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centre
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,
pharmacy
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a pharmacy
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 and
nursing
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a nursing
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 school. First of all, in 1960, there were only farmland,
shopping
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a shopping
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centre
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,
hospital
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a hospital
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 and
car
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a car
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 park which were evenly divided
in
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over
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 a quarter
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size
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apply
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of the land.
However
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, medical institutions -
cancer
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a cancer
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centre
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 and
pharmacy
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a pharmacy
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, replaced where
shopping
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the shopping
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centre
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 used to be,
whereas
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nursing
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a nursing
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 school was built on the farmland in 1980. After 20 years of periods, in 2000, the place of
car
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the car
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 park and
nursing
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the nursing
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shcool
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school
 both reduced
half
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by half
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 of its
size
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 and were located in the southeast
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size
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part
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 of the map.
Moreover
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, the department of
cancer
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the cancer
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centre
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 expanded its building and was three times bigger than
1980
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in 1980
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.
Pharmacy
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The pharmacy
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 and hospital remained the same during 1980 and 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words size, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • initial facilities
  • replacement
  • significant extension
  • absorbed
  • developments
  • introduction
  • adjacent
  • evolution
  • enhancing healthcare services
  • commercial spaces
  • medical facilities
  • expansion
  • modern healthcare needs
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