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IELTS Writing Correction Service Writing Samples Band 5 Your childhood friend has established his own business. He needs a partner whom he can completely trust and asks you to become his partner. Write a letter to him. In your letter: • Give the details about your knowledge in this particular field and your opinion; • Tell your decision and its reasons; • Thank him for trust and offer. You do NOT need to write any addresses

Dear Harjit, I hope you are doing well. Thank you so much for considering me as
potential
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 partner in your new business venture-I
truely appriciate
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truly appreciate
 your trust and confidence in me. First of all,
congratulation
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congratulations
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 on launching
sports
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the sports
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 academy!
it's
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 inspiring to see you achieve something you have been passionate
since
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about since
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 childhood. I have always admired your dedication to fitness and community development. As for my experience, I hold a diploma in sports management and have three years of experience at a local fitness
center
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centre
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. I have gained solid knowledge in operations, event planning, and client engagement, which I believe could
value
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be valuable
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 to your business. After careful thought, I have decided to accept your offer. Not only does business align with my
interest
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interests
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 and skills, but
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also I
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I also
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 see potential
growth
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for growth
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 in future, especially in our city
where
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, where
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such
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 facilities are limited. Thanks again
trusting
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for trusting
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 me with
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 opportunity. Warm regards, Amar.

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task achievement
Make sure to use correct spelling for words like 'truly' and 'appreciate'.
task achievement
Add a little more detail on how you can help the business.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea that connects together.
coherence and cohesion
Use a more straightforward conclusion to make your feelings clear.
task achievement
You express gratitude and congratulations well.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a warm and friendly tone.
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