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The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men & women per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men & women per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the total working
time
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 by males and females per week in Australia in 2007.
Overall
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, males significantly spend more
time
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 during the day on work than females; women spend the least
time
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 on work per day. To be more clear, nearly one half of males job 30-50 scheduled hours per week and females work more
time
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 than men for 10-20 hours per week , in 20 per cent. For over 80 hours , men and women stayed the same .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • Hours worked
  • Overall trend
  • Significant differences
  • Similarities
  • Peaks
  • Full-time
  • Part-time
  • Overtime
  • Proportion
  • Represented
  • Categories
  • Variations
  • Societal roles
  • National employment policies
  • Predominantly
  • Engaging in
  • Comparison
  • Domestic duties
  • Employment trends
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