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The climograph below shows average monthly temperatures and rainfall in the city of Kolkata. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest temperatures occur from April to
June
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,
while
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 the heaviest rainfall occurs from
June
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 to
September
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. The graph illustrates temperatures begin at around 20
degrees
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 in January and
increases
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 gradually to over 30
degrees
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 in May. After that, the temperature slightly decreases above 25
degrees
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 from
June
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 to
September
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 and significantly drops to around 20
degrees
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 in December. It is noticeable that precipitation stays very low from January to April,
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 nearly 50mm each month. Surprisingly, rainfall rises in May to
September
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, peaks in July and August, and both months have nearly 350mm of rain. After that, the amount of rainfall decreases quickly to about 300mm from October to December.
As a result
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, Kolkata has a hot climate throughout the year, and a rainy season between
June
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 and
September
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. Dried seasons from November to March

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly summarizes the main trends or features of the graph you are describing.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use linking words to connect your ideas more clearly, helping the reader to follow your explanations.
task achievement
Make sure to include more specific data points or comparisons to strengthen your response.
content
You clearly identified the main trends in temperature and rainfall.
coherence and cohesion
The structure is mostly clear, with an introduction and conclusion present.

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