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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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US households separated
in
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into
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 five groups by their annual
income
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 in 2007, 2011, and 2015.
Overall
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, there are two noticeable points in the chart.
Firstly
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, the highest
number
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 of households belonged to
families
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 with $100,000
income
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 a
year
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$100,000
 in 2015.
Secondly
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,
families
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 with $75,000-$99,999 annual
income
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 were the lowest group of all time. As presented in the chart, the
number
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 of
families
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 whose annual
income
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were
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was
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 $25,00 to $49,999 was approximately 5
millions
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million
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 more
that
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than
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families
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 whose
income
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less
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was less
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 than $25,000. The figures of both groups rose
around
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by around
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 3
million
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families
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 in 2011, and the
number
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 decreased by 1
million
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 in 2015.
In addition
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, the
number
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 of $50,000-75,000
income
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families
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 remained stable at 21
million
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 households. The $75,000-$99,999 group witnessed a few changes, but it was placed as the lowest at just under 15
million
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. The
number
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 of
families
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 with over $100,000
income
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 per year went down from just under 30
millions
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million
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 to 27
millions
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million
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 in 4 years.
Then
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, it rocketed to over 33
million
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 in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, income, families, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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