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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area ofBritain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area ofBritain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and pie charts give data on the police
of Britain budget
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budget of Britain
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 for 2018 and 2017. The table indicates where the sources of
money
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 came from, and the pie charts show how it was
utilized
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utilised
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. It can be seen that, in 2017 and 2018, the national government gave the most
money
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 for
police
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the police
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 of
britain
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Britain
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budget
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apply
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.
Moreover
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, they spent most of their
money
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for
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on
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 paying their officers and staff in both 2017 and 2018, but the lowest
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money
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amount
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 spent
on was
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was on
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for
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apply
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technology.
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, the total
of
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amount of
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money
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 they received in 2017 and 2018 was about 300
million
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. In the 2017 to 2018 period, the police of
britain
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Britain
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 received 175.5
million
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, and it increased by 2.3
million
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 in the next year for their budget. The total of
money
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 they received in 2017 and 2018
were
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was
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 304.7
million
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 and 318,6
million
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.
Although
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 salaries
was
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were
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 the
most
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largest
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 amount of
money
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 they spent on at about 75
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percent
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per cent
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 and 69
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percent
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per cent
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, technology was the lowest at about eight
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percent
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per cent
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 and 14
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percent
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per cent
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 in both 2018 and the year before.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, million, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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