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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.
The line graph illustrates changes in
crime
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 rates across three different sectors in Newport City from 2003 to 2012.
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, robbery experienced the fewest
incidents
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 among the three types of
crime
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.
While
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 car theft victims remained relatively stable, burglary cases saw a decline over the decade. Burglary began as the most prevalent
crime
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, with approximately 3,500
incidents
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 reported. After peaking at around 3,800 cases in 2004, the numbers fell sharply, dropping to just over a third of that peak figure by 2008. By 2012, the number of burglary
incidents
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stabilized
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 at about 1,400. Car theft had around 2,800
incidents
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 at the start of the decade, making it the
crime
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 with the highest number of victims.
Although
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 the figures dropped significantly after 2005, car theft rates gradually increased, returning to their original level by 2012. The
crime
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 rate for robbery remained largely unchanged throughout the decade. It started at nearly 700
incidents
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, decreased to 500 in 2008, and
then
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 returned to levels seen in 2003 by 2012.
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, robbery had the lowest total number of
incidents
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 during the 10-year period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, incidents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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