Last Friday you flew from New York to Paris. When you arrived home, you discovered that you had left your cabin bag on the plate. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter: •Where and when you lost your bag •What your bag looks like •What its content were

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Ashunkumar Patel
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I am writing
this
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letter to raise a concern regarding my cabin
bag
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which
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I forgot to collect from the security check-in at booth four.
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last
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Friday
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Friday,
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I took flight(JFK256) from New York to Paris
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as soon as
arrived
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I arrived
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at
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home
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home,
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I recognised that one
bag
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is
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left behind. I believe that my wait period after security check-in was
of
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one hour, so approximately 7:30 PM I put my
bag
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on
plate
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the plate
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. As
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gets
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was
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completed,
meanwhile
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I had an important phone call, and
due to
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the hussle
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hustle
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hussle,
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I forgot to collect that
bag
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. The
bag
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is in blue colored hard plastic case from American Tourister. The size of
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bag
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the bag
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is
same
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the same
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as the cabin requirement,
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there is
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a tag
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of
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with
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my name
refering
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referring
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to the
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address of my
destination
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destination,
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that is
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,
of
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Paris. In that
bag
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, there
are
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is are
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set of clothes, a pair of shoes, and some important travelling documents.
Apart from
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this
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, it contains my gadget accessories like cables, adapters and
few
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a few
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cash of $250, in the bills of $50. Kindly, I would like to request
you that
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that you
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look into
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matter
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priority
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a priority
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basis, and let me know
for
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the procedures how it will be returned. Yours
Sincerly
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sincerely
, Ashun Patel

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state what you want from the airline at the end of your letter to improve task response.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more linking words to connect your ideas and improve the flow of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Be careful with spelling and grammar, like 'hussle' should be 'hustle' and other minor mistakes, to make your writing clearer.
task achievement
You provided detailed information about where and when you lost the bag, which is very good for the task.
task achievement
Your description of the bag and its contents is clear and helps the reader understand better.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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